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PostSubject: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed Apr 24, 2013 9:30 am

Free Jutsu:

Name: Zeus' Lightning Bolt
Rank of Jutsu: B
Element Affinity: Lightning
Type: Ninjutsu
Distance: Long
Description: After the necessary handseals, the user generates lightning in his hands, and molds it into a shape of a lightning bolt 3 inches diameter. After locking on to his target, he throws the lightning. It travels at the speed of 50 mph. At impact, it would cause a bit of knockback, cause numbness for 3 post and 2nd degree burn. It would also pierce 1 cm into the skin, burning the wound at contact. Knockback can throw a person one meter back






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Kenkakku Style:
 


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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed Apr 24, 2013 10:20 am

On the D, I'm going to need you to add that handseals are needed. Also, give me a duration as to how long the clones stay active and increase the cooldown to 5. If the duration of the clones goes anywhere above 4, add onto the cooldown 2 for each post that it lasts longer. (For example if you made it last 6 posts the cooldown would be 9)

The C is in our canon list so it is automatically approved.

Speed of sound is a bit much. Make the radius of the bolt 2 inches, but since the damage is so low, it can move at.. say.. 50mph. It also needs a cooldown.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu Apr 25, 2013 5:52 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Sat Apr 27, 2013 9:15 am

Hydra Clone:
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State what can release the target from the genjutsu.

Zeus' Lightning Bolt:
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How far can this knockback actually knock a target back?

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Sun Apr 28, 2013 3:43 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Tue Apr 30, 2013 5:27 am

Bump, and you can also start checking the Kenkakku style jutsu
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Tue Apr 30, 2013 9:30 am

Toss a cooldown on that B rank and you'll be ready to go! (Probably about 5 or 6 posts)

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 01, 2013 9:19 am

I added 5 post cooldown to it. Now, I have 3 new jutsu, which I want to buy. I'll keep my B rank
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 01, 2013 9:19 am

I added 5 post cooldown to it. Now, I have 3 new jutsu, all three under the same style, and some other minor jutsu, which I want to buy.
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 01, 2013 9:53 am

Separate in another post what all you want to buy apart from the free ones.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 01, 2013 10:28 am

To buy(Kenkakku Stance) :

Kenkakku 1st style : Counter Stance



Rank of Jutsu: D

Element Affinity: /

Type: Kenjutsu

Distance: Self

Description: Requires charging chakra on the tip of the blade for one post. The user first lifts his blade over his head, and spins it around in circles, with the tip of the blade imbued with chakra. The user stands on the balls of their feet and moves gracefully, following the point of the blade and using its weight and momentum to increase their evasion speed. Grants an increase in speed of 20%, though only while evading attacks. After evading the attack, the user can end the jutsu by attacking the target, just a normal attack. Last 3 post, 6 post cooldown




Kenkakku Style 2nd Form: Everything is not what it seems



Rank of Jutsu: D

Element Affinity: /

Type: Genjutsu

Distance: Mid

Description: Requires charging chakra at the eye. After gaining eye contact, the target is under the genjutsu. The user would then leave an illusionary clone, at where he was standing, while he would be invisible from the target's view. The user can control the "illusion clone", while he can stealthily move. Destroying the clone would end the genjutsu immediately. If the user moves away from the target, the clone would last for 3 post, while the user is stealthed. If the user moves towards the target, and enters a radius 20 feet from the target, the genjutsu last only 1 second. Cooldown of 5 post. Can be broken with kai or pain.

Kenkakku Style 3rd form:Lag



Rank of Jutsu: B

Element Affinity: /

Type: Genjutsu

Distance: Eyesight

Description:
Description: Requires charging chakra at the eye. After gaining eye contact, the target is under the user's genjutsu. This Genjutsu causes the opponent's senses to "lag" by 3 seconds. The opponent's sight, hearing, sense of feeling, and etc are all affected. This last for 2 post, with a cooldown of 9 post. Can be broken with kai or pain.


To buy:


Velocitatem



Rank of Jutsu: E

Element Affinity: /

Type: Ninjutsu

Distance: Short

Description: After charging chakra in the stomach for one post, the user can release the most stinkiest fart ever. Cooldown 4 post.


Candy Lover



Rank of Jutsu: D

Element Affinity: /

Type: Ninjutsu

Distance: Contact

Description: The ninjutsu is cast by touching/holding an object. The user then channels his chakra into the object for one post, and then turning it to candy for 3 post. During this 3 post, if the user eats the object, the object will remain in candy form, and will just be digested like a normal candy. If the user doesn't eat it, it will just turn back to its original form after the 3 post. The user can change it to any candy, and any flavor. Can turn anything to candy, as long as he can hold it, and once eaten, the object will not transform any longer.


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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 01, 2013 10:28 am

There, done!
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 02, 2013 11:04 am

General things: Every technique requires handseals or charging, which you can write like this "Requires handseals" or "Requires charging equal to handseals", there are rules that dictate charge times for this accordingly and can be found in the RUles forum under 'Comprehensive battle rules'.

Counter Stance - Ok lets break this down, stances are meant to work like this. 'Enter the stance. Gain a passive benefit for a duration or some sort of special move from it, or both.' At the moment it sounds like your stance increases your evasion speed by using the weight of the sword and its momentum to move through the air quicker. Just describe it simply like...

'The user stands on the balls of their feet and moves gracefully, following the point of the blade and using its weight and momentum to increase their evasion speed. Grants an increase in speed of 20%, though only while evading attacks'.

As for the final attack from the sounds of the name of the jutsu it should be a special strike you use if you succesfulyl evade an attack, either way you need to describe the damage of the strike, which should be pretty much just a normal cut.


2nd stance - Still requires charging, the sword movements are the trigger for the genjutsu and need to be described better, can the clone be destroyed, what can you do while in this tech? because being able to inst sneak attack without warning is too strong for a D rank, what can the clone do?

3rd stance - needs charging or handseals, the movements are the trigger for the jutsu and need to be described better. 3 seconds for C rank is probably a bit much, try lowering it to 1, which is still a reasonable amount if you really think about it.

Fart jutsu - Priced at 500 ryo

Candy Lover - What can be turned into candy, does it change back after you eat it?

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Fri May 03, 2013 7:21 am

Done changes. Increased lag's rank.
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Sat May 04, 2013 9:25 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Mon May 06, 2013 4:04 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Tue May 07, 2013 10:28 am

"(But how would the target know he's under a genjutsu?)"

Get rid of this from all genjutsu.

The answer is the Sharingan, or Sensory, or the Byakugan. Or if the genjutsu is so obviously not reality. Like if the world explodes and unicorns fly across the sky spewing fire from their teeth as an example of an obvious breech in reality.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 08, 2013 9:16 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Wed May 08, 2013 1:58 pm

You did not get rid of that phrase where it is located. Please remove it wherever it is still stated.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 5:27 am

I did remove it?
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 9:19 am

The spoiler in the first post.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 9:31 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 9:44 am

Counter Stance- Requires charging chakra on the tip of the blade for one post. The user first lifts his blade over his head, and spins it around in circles, with the tip of the blade imbued with chakra. The user stands on the balls of their feet and moves gracefully, following the point of the blade and using its weight and momentum to increase their evasion speed. Grants an increase in speed of 20%, though only while evading attacks. After evading the attack, the user can end the jutsu by attacking the target, just a normal attack.

How many posts does this last? Or is it just for one evasion?

Now for the genjutsu, they have nothing to do with kenjutsu, so you're going to have to get rid of that, they are only genjutsu.

Everything is Not What it Seems: Requires charging chakra at the eye, if to be done through eye contact, or charging chakra at the sword if to be done using sword movements. This functions the same way as how hypnosis using a pendulum works. After performing sword movements/gaining eye contact, the target is under the genjutsu. The user would then leave an illusionary clone, at where he was standing, while he would be invisible from the target's view. The user can control the "illusion clone", while he can stealthily move anywhere he likes. Destroying the clone would end the genjutsu immediately. The user cannot come anywhere 2 feet near the enemy. Doing this would immediately cancel the Genjutsu. This last for 3 post, with a cooldown of 5 post. Can be broken with kai or pain.

Way too stacked for a D rank. It makes you completely invisible for 3 posts? That can be set up as an auto-kill, an undodgable auto-kill, so I can't let it happen. Even with the two feet thing, two feet is an extremely short distance, and you could launch an attack at them so that as soon as the two feet is breeched, the genjutsu ends, yeah, but it's also too late for the enemy to realize what's happening. So here's what you're going to do. Get rid of the whole "sword movements" thing, it frankly doesn't make sense to me to make this anything but simple eye contact. Now, for a D rank, there's only one way to make this fair. Say that the invisibility of you only lasts for 1 second, and then you are visible and the clone disappears. Change the cooldown to 3 posts.

Lag: Requires charging chakra at the eye, if to be done through eye contact, or charging chakra at the sword if to be done using sword movements. This functions the same way as how hypnosis using a pendulum works. After performing sword movements/gaining eye contact, the target is under the user's genjutsu. This Genjutsu causes the opponent's senses to "lag" by 3 seconds. The opponent's sight, hearing, sense of feeling, and etc are all affected. This last for 3 post, with a cooldown of 6 post. Can be broken with kai or pain.

Same thing, just make it eye contact, especially for as extreme a genjutsu. Increase the cooldown to 9 posts, make the duration 2 posts.

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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 10:08 am

Counter Stance - 3 post, 6 post cooldown.

Genjutsu- They use sword movements to look cool xD, though, you can do it just by using eye contact.

Everything is not what it seems - What if I make it B rank, can I keep it the way it is? Or I don't mind reducing the amount of post it last. I want to make it this way so the clone can act as a decoy, so the user can escape, or to use it offensively.

Lag- Done what you asked me too, though I kept sword movements, making eye contact an option, too.
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PostSubject: Re: Hades' Jutsu Registration   Thu May 09, 2013 10:30 am

Priced at 4,000 Ryo for both D ranks and 9583 for the B.

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